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Nope, I am not talking about the site of my recent root canal. I am talking about a sentence in a health column I was editing today for the intranet site at work:

It is often required that either a pediatric rheumatologist or arheumatologist [sic] does the evaluation.

Dear heavens above, what possessed this author?

>faceplant<

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rachel_reicheru
May. 27th, 2011 01:15 am (UTC)
That sentence confuses me. I'm not sure if it should or not because me and grammer never really stood on the same side of a paragraph, but ... It just doesn't flow well, and if "does" is an exact thing, it sounds weird to open the sentence with the work "often." - But that last bit might be because I'm crazy.

chomiji
May. 28th, 2011 02:51 am (UTC)

Sadly, this may be partially my fault. I've told the contributing authors that they have to use "their own words" when they take information from other articles, because otherwise, it's plagiarism. But this was probably some fairly technical stuff, and she didn't have enough skill to turn the passive sentence to an active one, so ... this happened.



Edited at 2011-05-28 02:51 am (UTC)
smillaraaq
May. 27th, 2011 01:22 am (UTC)
So an arheumatoligist is...the absence of a rheumatologist? Or a specialist who treats people who are lacking a musculoskeletal system? I bet they have a big fluffy pet alot, too... XD
lawless523
May. 27th, 2011 01:23 am (UTC)
Hee!
smillaraaq
May. 27th, 2011 02:57 am (UTC)
Icon love!
lawless523
May. 27th, 2011 03:06 am (UTC)
Re: Icon love!
I love the alot! I borrowed the icon from pfmoi, who wasn't sure where it came from.
chomiji
May. 28th, 2011 02:53 am (UTC)

Just a typo, I bet. I've told them that they have to use their own words and not just steal sentences from other people's articles ... this material obviously pushed her to her limits.

lawless523
May. 27th, 2011 01:26 am (UTC)
I wonder if the biggest problem was lack of proofreading. I think what s/he meant was "it is often necessary for a pediatric or other type of rheumatologist to conduct the evaluation."
rachel_reicheru
May. 27th, 2011 04:08 am (UTC)
That makes more sense to me than the original sentence. I dont have to do three double takes to have it make sense.
smillaraaq
May. 27th, 2011 04:15 am (UTC)
And really, unless this article was focusing heavily on something like juvenile arthritis, I think they could arguably have just left out the mention of pediatric specialists in the interest of clarity. A pediatric rheumatologist is still a rheumatologist; whatever disorder/screening test is being written about, it's clearly something you'd go to musculoskeletal specialist for; sub-specialists focusing on musculoskeletal issues in pediatric or geriatric patients could logically be assumed to be included in the more general set if appropriate to a patient's age group.
lawless523
May. 27th, 2011 04:38 am (UTC)
My assumption was that it was a condition more prevalent in children, because otherwise the reference to pediatric rheumatologists seemed pointless.
chomiji
May. 28th, 2011 02:59 am (UTC)

Yup - Juvenile Arthritis was the topic.

chomiji
May. 28th, 2011 02:58 am (UTC)

Title of article: "Juvenile Arthritis."

I don't mind it when we get into Disease of the Month pieces, but in this case, she had particular trouble re-writing the FAQs she found online so that she wasn't plagiarizing them. The original material (I think I pinpointed it from her additional info links) was heavily into passive voice.

My rewrite actually ended up being two sentences. It's surprising how many people won't recognize "rheumatologist" (I had to explain "endodontist" to a couple of people this past week), so I did a little explaining as well as rewriting.

chomiji
May. 28th, 2011 02:54 am (UTC)

That's more or less what was meant, I'm sure.

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